In this hectic modern era, most parents have to work overtime in order to lead a gratifying life for their children. Consequently, this lefts them with a limited amount of time to spend with their family. While some people believe that the best use of this time is to play sports and have fun with their offspring, others, however, stand on the other side of the continuum, they believe that this time should be dedicated to children’s school work. I vehemently cling to the notion that it’s more beneficial to spend that to have some quality time with kids. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind, elucidating my standpoint, is concerned with the issue that the growing self-centeredness of social mentality in this fast-paced modernized world has caused gradual withdrawal from society and turned people into passive individuals, and family members are no exception to this matter. In other words, contemporary humans are inclined toward solitary activities and their social circle is strictly limited. Therefore, children by having a delightful time with their parents can compensate for this adversity. By doing so, a robust bond would shape between them as they have an enjoyable time together. On the other hand, spending more time on schoolwork would just aggravate the problem. Children, especially juveniles, need to spend some time away from their homework and try to enhance their relationship with their parents. This itself is adequate to spend the limited time available on games, rather than assignments.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that by playing sports and games, parents can teach their offspring that life is not just about working and studying, and they need to enjoy other aspects of life. In this stressful modern world, a plethora of people devote their whole life to working and studying, until they grew old and find their life meaningless. Children need to learn to spend their lifetime in the best way possible and enjoy every moment of it. They need to understand the fact that these memorable moments make our lives fulfilling and enable us to pursue our passions and desires, and one can not persevere without them. In fact, the results and statistics of a research study conducted recently, indicate that individuals who spend a modest amount of time on entertainment, are more likely to have a longer life span and less likely to be diagnosed with depression and anxiety. In contrast, by spending time with kids on homework, we plant the seed in their brains that all that matters is their academic performance.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons into account, I strongly believe that parents should devote their free time to entertaining activities, on the ground that this would strengthen their relationship with their kids, as well as it would teach them to have fun besides their education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, in contrast, in fact, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2546.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10220440882 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74717997285 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513026052104 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3924841483 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2631578947 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38214317114 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129955541415 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989274733964 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255030880003 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815545710278 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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