This is a challenging decision about what should children do when their parents are busy. In my opinion, this is very useful for both children and their parents to spend that time to have fun playing games and sports. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, playing games and sports help students to strengthen their communications skills. Studies have shown since children who play with others are more in relation with their peers, they develop more sophisticated and progressed communication abilities. This helps them in their future opportunities. For example, my brother used to stay at home and play with him, but I preferred to go out and play with my friends. Because of these two different demeanors, we had a varied situation when we arrived at school. Since I had experienced collaborating and communicating with my peers, I was able to face the first year of school very. On the other hand, my brother had a lot of problems in communicating with others, and that made himself hatred with the school. If he had more talked with his friends before school, he wouldn't have hated school at all.
Secondly, having a play and sport helps children health. Once children have physical activities, not only their physical health would preserve, but also, they won't suffer from mental diseases. My own experience is compelling evidence for this concept, and, this is again, my brother and I story. As I mentioned, my brother preferred to stay at our home and study than playing games and sports. Although my brother and I had the same food and the same situation in the house, I had better general health. He suffered from obesity; however, I was in fitness. Moreover, he had a tired spirit and always was unwilling to carry out his responsibilities. But, as my mother says, I possess a happy characteristic.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that children should spend their time playing games and sports because this helps them to extend their communication skills and because these practices improve their mental and physical general health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...lked with his friends before school, he wouldnt have hated school at all. Secondly, ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92415730337 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76918284464 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516853932584 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9741289368 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.65 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246724010404 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074879329624 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890794773433 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169946291242 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741487668026 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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