TPO47: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about the events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In our modern life, we are surrounded by lots of news and information about everything; politicals, sports, wars, economics, etc. Due to the emerging of new technologies and high-speed internet connections, it has become easier to access news and events around the world. To my mind, we should use this opportunity and get updated information about what is happening around the world. Even it doesn't affect our life. And I am going to give my reasons for this idea in the following paragraphs.
First of all, a simple reason is that it can increase our general knowledge, So we have something to say and, it will help us to communicate, make connections with people. I don't mean that we should leave comments on any subject. For instance, to clear my mean, I used to be a shy person. I was always quiet among people, either my family or friends. After a while, I tried to get information about events and news in other countries and speak about them with others. It worked! It helped me to communicate better than before!
Besides, It may seem that this kind of information won't affect our life, But actually, it will, in an indirect way. It's all about getting experience, not by really encounter the events, but by hearing about it. Indeed We could learn a lot from this news. We can analyze them with ourselves, maybe compare them with events in our life and use them to improve, or even improvise new solutions.
To sum up, I believe nowadays, it is necessary to be up to date about the news. It affects us in many ways and can broadcast our prospective, our horizon of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, if, may, really, so, while, for instance, kind of, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63120567376 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67658860361 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606382978723 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0286514284 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.625 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18264514713 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590740680641 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504836741977 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1105022643 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546278795713 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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