TPO5 independent writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do

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TPO5 independent writing- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

Advertisements or movies keep reminding us that we only live once, which means that having a fun life is crucial. We are being taught that having a relaxing life is equally important to having a diligent life. However, in my opinion, people today are not spending too much time on personal enjoyment due to several reasons.

First of all, people nowadays require to study more than people in the past. In my parents’ generation, people were not requiring to study till 12 years old. They had more time in their childhood to do what they like to do. Nevertheless, people nowadays are forced to undertake compulsory education until we are 18 years old. There are so many cram schools that students can spend extra learning time. Besides, going to college is becoming a trend that we have to enter even we are not enthusiastic on learning. That is to say, we spend more time on doing what we have to do than doing what we like.


Secondly, the work time per week today is not less than before. As soon as our school life is ended, our work life start. Most of the companies need workers to stay in the office from 9 am to 6 pm including an hour lunch break from Monday to Friday. As the result, the time we can fully arrange by ourselves is little. To take myself as an example, I have to spend two hours daily commuting time from my home to the office. After deducting bath and meal time, I only have three hours to spend on personal enjoyment. Therefore, it’s impossible to spend too much time on what I like to do.

Admittedly, it is undeniable that recreation are abundant today. There are a lot of movie theaters or video games appeared. Yet, people can’t enjoy them too much if people’s free time is not enough. Besides, life is full with competitive people. We feel stressed if we rest too much and not follow up other people’s footsteps.

To sum up, people today don't spend too much time on personal enjoyment because it is more important to spend time on studying and working based on most people’s value system.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
...’ generation, people were not requiring to study till 12 years old. They had more time i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57220708447 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47574038208 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542234332425 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4722756125 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2727272727 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6818181818 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30433231146 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897215767933 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117354625737 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165182870244 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677573738917 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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