Nowadays, with the proliferation of state-of-art devices, the youth are having more means of relaxing, themselves especially movies and televisions. From my own perspective, I am afraid I have to disagree with the statement that the unprecedented things would exert more negative effects than passive effects on young people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
To begin with, the virtual scenes is out of imagination, which has a insurmountable gap between reality. I would like to start with my own experience. My mother used to take me to cinema for a new film when I was in high school after class. The kinds of movies I had seen were plentiful including more or less smoking, drug abusing or even murdering. At first, I was fearful and confused about why I should sit here watch those uncomfortable scenes. Therefore, I went to see my mother out of curiosity of her motive. Surprisingly, she just slightly smiled at me and padded in my face, then said in a gentle voice," keep relaxed, babe. They are just movies." To be honest, I felt still confused right after hearing her answer. Fortunately, I now understand it since the passive emotion brought by those movies will not last. They are just fiction stories although filmmakers endeavor to make it real.
Secondly, the terrible scenes from movies and television can help me resist inappropriate behaviors. There is no doubt that many literary movie will not exclude sex, death and serious topics out of their discussion because they make up a necessary part of our lives and this society. Besides, I trust that most people born with mercy and ability to differentiate the kindness and evil. As a result, they might get inspiration and motivation to protect the bright side of this world. For instance, a documentary of Second World War might remind most people, especially for young generation who did not experience wars in person, the invaluable price of peace. Then, they would not tend to hurt others when they do confront with those situations.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the harmless movies or television will not passively influence our young people. This is because there is huge distinction between reality and imagination world; and because most serious fictional works are educating and inspiring.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, i am afraid, more or less, to begin with, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04896907216 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87583944133 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618556701031 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0804719137 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2857142857 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4761904762 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61904761905 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181193064375 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449629867162 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623813616053 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117159237221 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992340106996 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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