Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that in this complicated and progressing era in which we live, media, specifically television, play a crucial role in the life of the humankind. People used to watch TV, and spend lots of time gathering information and enjoying movies, amusements and TV shows. While young people are no exception to this notion, some believe that television has more disadvantages compared to its benefits for them. Personally speaking, I agree with this claim, and I will make my side more clear in the next paragraphs.
First, getting used to aggressively watching movies and TV will cause serious health problems. While young people need to take care of themselves by going to gyms and sports clubs in their spare times, many of them prefer to stay at home, watching TV, and spending most of their time not moving, staring at the TV screens. This unhealthy behavior leads to serious mental and physical problems, like anxiety and obesity. A personal example can drive this notion home. I have a twenty-year-old brother who spends most of his time in front of the TV, watching movies and playing TV games. Although he used to be a healthy guy before getting addicted to TV, he gradually started to gain weight and experienced different stresses and headaches. Finally, we made him visit a doctor, and the doctor prohibited him of TV-related issues for two months.
Second, family relationships can be adversely affected by excessive attention to TV programs. It is crystal clear that the members of a family need to communicate with one another, and they should spend time together when they are at home. However, in many families, it is customary for members to watch TV instead of talking and communicating while they gather in the house. Therefore, the family's bonds and connections will be weakened, and family members will separate from each other.
Finally, young people need to strengthen their social abilities through communication and making continuous bonds with others. In this regard, they need to spend their time out of their rooms, discussing with others, playing outdoor games, taking part in social activities, and doing volunteering jobs. However, watching movies and TV shows are indoor activities which utterly stand against these activities. Thus, people lose their connections, become couch potatoes, and opt for a solitary lifestyle.
In sum, I believe that TV and movies are harmful to young people and they should control their behavior while using them. Causing severe mental and physical problems, dividing family members apart and threatening social behaviors are disadvantages of the TV for youths.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17757009346 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76053156919 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549065420561 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3928551957 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.523809524 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0884869948879 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0301908129637 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029714601037 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0569144227521 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330241622249 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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