traveling to foreign countries is better than moving in their own country like going to different cities in the country.
In my opinion, traveling to foreign countries is better than moving in their own country like going to different cities in the country. Personally, I disagree that People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
First of all, traveling to foreign country provides you with new cultures, languages learning and also makes you gain more skills that you never been accepted before, especially in your relationships with other people from different places. In my situation I am living now in the USA, I traveled to the USA from three years ago. Originally I am from Egypt, and I think that this experiment or you can say adventure is my essential event that happened to me in my life. I learned many languages in the USA like American English, Hindu and also Japanese. The reason for that, because I am studying at the American University in Fairfield city and this helped me in learning new languages and recognize new cultures.
Finally, the traveling to America helped me in finding excellent opportunities in my career. I am working as Game Developer.I faced many problems related to this field in my country. In Egypt, you don't have more chances to get game developer position in any company. The reason for this problem that most programming companies in my country preferred to make web apps or mobile applications app related to industries companies like accounting programs, production analysis programs, in addition to developing apps for restaurants and other commercial enterprises. Rarely to find the company that makes games apps and if we see it, the company will give you few salary compared to the actual wage to this job in another country. So for these problems that I struggled with it in my country, I founded that the USA provided me with more chances in Games programming field, and also I am taking high salary associated with more advantages in my company in the USA.
In conclusion, I see that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries than from moving in their own country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'been'.
Suggestion: been never
...lso makes you gain more skills that you never been accepted before, especially in your rel...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... career. I am working as Game Developer.I faced many problems related to this fie...
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Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...this field in my country. In Egypt, you dont have more chances to get game developer...
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Line 4, column 379, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'applications'' or 'application's'?
Suggestion: applications'; application's
...ry preferred to make web apps or mobile applications app related to industries companies lik...
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Line 4, column 565, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Rarely' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...rants and other commercial enterprises. Rarely to find the company that makes games ap...
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Line 4, column 658, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun salary seems to be countable; consider using: 'few salaries'.
Suggestion: few salaries
...if we see it, the company will give you few salary compared to the actual wage to this job...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95114942529 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7681394086 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485632183908 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5096496499 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321769097833 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143168292868 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.237299026569 0.0737576698707 322% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323525303509 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.274558983707 0.0645574589148 425% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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