At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
he universities and colleges, are trying to improve their efficiency more and more in today's world. However it is vital that students health should be considered both mental and physical perspectives, but the quality and quantity of the system of training is much more important. Some young people who are going to continue their education choose future colleges or universities according to their rankings. Personally, I am agree with them, and I feel this way for two main reasons which i have explore in the following essay.
Firstly, by developing the new technologies in all fields of life, it is clear that why universities should try to access up-date information through internet and other informational resources. This process needs money, and we all know that these organizations have defined amount of budget to spend; As a result, the management of monetary system is advisable. A prime example from my own experience may shed some light on this point. Two years ago, when i was working on my project in the university, i needed some chemical reagents for synthesis the new molecules in chemistry laboratory. My country was in sanction, then it was very difficult to access new information from scientific sites or prepare the materials even by spending too much money. In parallel, my university made new buildings for sports and other related activities despite of my emergency needs. I had to wait several mounts until my desired chemicals arrived. Besides, i forced to use some spectroscopic equipment such as NMR and IR to determine whether my desired products were made or not. Unfortunately, those instruments were out of work, so, i struggled with many troubles. Had my university spent money on improving research necessities, preventing of all problems I could have finished my thesis..
In addition, if universities provide situations which students could attend in some sports and social activities off campus by some policies, not only will they save money, but they also may prepare proper fields to cooperate of volunteer students in social activities. For instance, the college of my brother has a contract with a sport club, and only a few of his classmates have membership in that. In spite of that they can attend in many various program such as local and national competitions, training classes, friendly trips, etc. Consider, if the college had spent money for these kind of programs instead of ameliorating classes and libraries, a few persons would have used of them. As a result, it might was a kind of lavishing.
Overall, it can be deduced that according to the above reasons financial support should not be devoted equal to sports and social programs as same as classes and libraries. The most essential factor for determination of the station of a college or university is the quality and quantity of their training facilities. Because, final goal of attending in colleges or universities is acquiring knowledge in field of science or technologies, unless it is easy to enroll in sports clubs or social activities!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, i feel, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2571.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12151394422 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94532269791 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549800796813 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2209960786 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.863636364 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164213563139 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429195354 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608993600292 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117092636726 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849390493897 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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