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At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Many universities all over the world provide an enormous amount of finance for all activities in their college in addition to the curriculum. However, personally I believe that classes and libraries have remarkable value in universities in contrast to extracurricular activities. I feel this way for 2 reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The primary goal of a student in a college is to study rather than performing sport or social activities. So the factors needed to improve the efficiency of learning must be enhanced. Libraries and classes are inevitable for this purpose. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I'm currently a dentist. About 5 years ago, during my college period, my university renovated our dental library. Moreover, it created a new dental museum. It was inaugurated by honorable education minister at that time. This was very informative and successful as a result, a lot of other dental colleges copied our idea after getting motivated by our new ventures. Accordingly, I came to see new materials and equipment from the museum that I only have seen in textbooks. It really helped in my career to become a successful clinician. For this reason, I can firmly say that students should concentrate more on their field of education rather than sports or other social activities.
Secondly, the money should be used for maintaining proper seating arrangements, audiovisual effects, appropriate air conditioners and heaters, good and insulating windows and doors for efficacious functioning of an excellent classroom because of the meticulous design and functioning of a lecture hall is crucial in student life. Our university efficiently managed the finance for their students which are fulfilling. For instance, our classroom was too small and total strength was 50. Also we lack a lecturer dice. We reported this to our management and therefore they shifted our classrooms to a new building with sophisticated arrangements. They created a new stage for the lecturer, hence we can see him clearly no matter where we sit. On top of that, professor can see us and can watch each of the students during lecture hours. Likewise, I can accurately say that if the management invests on students, they will surely pay back by achieving top ranks and achievements in academics. That reputation will stay longer for every college.
In conclusion, I'm of the opinion that all priorities relating to classes and libraries should be endorsed. Shaping young minds through academic excellence and the infrastructure in a university is worth in contrast to financially supporting extracurricular activities.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2695035461 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14143570343 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569739952719 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.9333085962 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7307692308 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2692307692 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.19230769231 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160654695808 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403192757593 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513736714498 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118691202946 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620825013907 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

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or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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