University has 2 programs for students in break time between 2 semesters. Which one do you prefer?
1-taking some courses or classes which have no connection with your major,
2-take work project (working in city, or in school to teach children to overcome/ do their homework)
The break time between two semesters are usually about a week long, and a week is not long enough to go to an internship or even go to a trip. However, there are certain programs, such as these two mentioned in the question that students can participate in, which are both fun and useful. In this way they don’t get to waste their time, besides, parents are satisfied as well. At the end of the break by requiring a report from the students they will have to take these programs seriously, so they will benefit from it directly. Some students like to widen their areas of knowledge. Others believe starting to build their career as soon as possible will improve their chance of getting successful. There are advantages and disadvantages for both programs which I will discuss below.
On the one hand, taking a work project related to one’s major in university could have its benefits. One of the benefits is that they can use the courses they have learned in their classes and implement them in the real world. They get to examine which parts of the theories they have learned are practical and which parts can only be applied in the papers. Therefore, they will learn their courses more thoroughly and deeply. In addition, they will have the chance to build connections in the real world work environment. Having a broader network could be helpful when they want to start their first job, or even when they want to start their own business. Besides, if they choose to teach some of the subjects they have learned in schools, they will learn them better themselves. Plus, not all of the students want to work in the city, many of them might want to become teachers and professors someday. In this way, they will have more experience and will find out whether or not they are caught out to become teachers.
On the other hand, some students prefer to give a break to their brain. The human brain, in order to function properly, needs to have breaks. If it focuses on one specific thing for long time, level of concentration will decrease. Participating in fun and enjoyable classes which are not related to our main study, could give a new perspective to us. After this break, we might come up with more creative ideas, and our critical thinking and problem solving skills will improve. Furthermore, these unrelated material might be connected to our field of study. For instance, when Steve Jobs was in college, he took a course in art. Back then, he never thought it will get handy someday, but when his company wanted to design the new Iphone, that course gave him vision and insight for deciding which design to pick. As a result, the design of these smart phones are as sophisticated as it could get. Moreover, we might find new interests or talents we never thought we might have. Trying new things and taking risks will open up new opportunities for us, and by having a wider area of expertise, we might be better candidates for opening job opportunities in the current competitive job market.
To summarize, both programs have drawbacks and benefits. It depends on the characteristics of each individual which one to choose. Personally, I prefer to take unrelated courses, to widen my knowledge and give a break to my brain. These courses might be entertaining, that could release my stress, which every student needs after a semester of hard work. Also, they are great investment for my future, whether I realize it now or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 698, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...iness. Besides, if they choose to teach some of the subjects they have learned in schools, ...
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Line 3, column 799, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...learn them better themselves. Plus, not all of the students want to work in the city, many...
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Line 3, column 974, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... have more experience and will find out whether or not they are caught out to become teachers....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 9.8082437276 285% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2860.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 602.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75083056478 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55294646995 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478405315615 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 865.8 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8415430881 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.375 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254570573642 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686899388819 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512869326964 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160921447434 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200226149543 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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