A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually
Training classes for teachers usually aims to improve their teaching methods and abilities. Due to the restricted budget of governments and limited time of teachers, finding an effective way of holding these training classes is really important. In this regard, some experts believe that attending online classes is much more effective, while others believe choosing a small group of excellent teachers and training them and want them to pass their information to other teachers in their school is more beneficial. If I were a educational expert, I would held classes for some excellent teachers and would asked them to pass their new knowledge to their colleagues for several reasons.
First of all, although online classes can save a lot of time for teachers, many teachers reported that these classes are not as effective as physical classes. They say that when they attend a class, they can ask their questions and the tutor of the class will clarify the ambiguities. Moreover they can discuss what they have learned with other teachers and use others ideas. Recently, a research was done among high school teachers in my country about attending online classes. Around 80 percents of them contended that they prefer to attend a class.
Secondly, many experienced teachers are old and do not progress with the technology. Thus, they may not know how to utilize these online materials and how can these materials help them. So they may spend a lot of time on these materials and because they don’t know how to use them, this group of teachers will defer to use the online materials. On the other hand, if a tutor is available, this group of teachers will learn the advancements and will defenitely exploit the new methods in their classes.
Last but not least, teaching what you have learned to others helps you to understand it better. When the selected group of teachers who attend the class, convey the information they get in those classes to their colleagues, they can use these methods much more better. So this method not only helps their co workers, but also helps the selected teachers.
In conclusion, I think asking excellent teachers to attend classes and teach the new methods to their colleagues will improve the education system better. However, in my opinion, if governments put more budget on these kind of programs, all the teachers can attend these classes which would be much more beneficial to the education system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ir school is more beneficial. If I were a educational expert, I would held classe...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'hold'
Suggestion: hold
...If I were a educational expert, I would held classes for some excellent teachers and...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
...s for some excellent teachers and would asked them to pass their new knowledge to the...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...the class will clarify the ambiguities. Moreover they can discuss what they have learned...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the online materials. On the other hand, if a tutor is available, this group of t...
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...ed to others helps you to understand it better. When the selected group of teachers wh...
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... but also helps the selected teachers. In conclusion, I think asking excellent ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...nion, if governments put more budget on these kind of programs, all the teachers can atten...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02450980392 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54751086571 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446078431373 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.424212136 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.888888889 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354143619695 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126032425532 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606153962455 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21333261787 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690481161403 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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