Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Finding a way to maintain relationships is crucial. People use different ways to keep a relationship in a good condition. Some people thinks it is good to communicate with others a lot while others thinks it is better to leave others for some periods. Personally speaking, if I want to improve my relationships with others, I will regularly communicate with them. I think this helps me to develop my relationships and make them stronger for several reasons.
First of all, in order to make a relationship strong, you need to know your counterparts very well. Staying away from people doesn’t help you to get enough information about their personalities. Moreover, you will forget about your last find outs. On the other hand, when you communicate regularly with your friends, you have enough time to scrutinize their personality. You can find out what their special habits are and what they really like. Imagine a husband doesn’t know what kind of food his wife likes. This may easily cause conflicts and degrades the quality of their relationship.
Second, when you leave your friends or family members for a while, they may think that you don’t care about them. Therefore, there would always be a misunderstanding among your friends that you easily forget them. . There is a famous Persian proverb in this regard which says,” If a person is not in front of your eyes, you can easily forget them.” This proverb clearly declares how long absences can demolish your relationships. For instance, last year I was really busy and I didn’t have enough time to see what is going on with my friends. Once, one of my friends called me and she was very upset. I really tried to help her and make her calm, but at the end of our dialog she told me that she didn’t want my advice, because I didn’t care about my friend. That was just a misunderstanding. My friends were really important for me, but my absence conveyed the message that I had forgotten them and I hadn’t care about their feelings. However, if you be present in different parts of others lives, they conclude that they are important for you. So your relationships will improve.
To sum up, I think being present in your relationships helps you a lot to strengthen them. This is due to the fact that you have more time to know your buddies. In addition, others believe that your love of them is real and definitely you care about their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83571428571 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85001383533 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490476190476 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5327148162 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.24 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203284153676 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654859410045 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702849517466 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150867256892 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957494921101 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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