A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example: computers and printers) that it provides for students. Or it can redesign spaces where students hold club meetings and gather with friends in their spare time to make these areas more comfortable and appealing. Which idea do you prefer and why?
In the modern world, the universities have been changing in their technologies, their educaional system, and also reforming their buildings and campuses. So indespinsible is for universities, that they shoud know how to spend thier boudget. The controversial question which arises here is that it is better for universities to pay money for redesignin of spaces or improving the technological systems. As far As I am concerned I perefer to change the space of buldings and campus. I elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first reason I want to point out is that nowdays students have their own copmputer and occasionally use the computers of the university. It would be an asset to students, if the unersity improve its computers, but students use their laptops insted of those computers. Hence, it can be an extra cost for the universty to watse its budget to update the quality of its technologies. In addition, students use the university's computers an printers just for simple and short tasks, so former computers and printers are good enough to perform their works. Accordingly, I believe that updating will be unusable and university can pay its money for another beneficial things. Had I was the rector of the university, I have spend the boudget on changing the space of university.
The second reason is redesigning spaces where students use them frequently beings about increasing the level of the university's rank. Using these spaces, students can gather with together and make scientific conversations. These meeting, finally, renders the new ideas and new ideas creats innovative productions which can promote the scientifec prestigue of the university. Moreover, those meeting which happen out of buildings always are more advantagious than meeting in a close space, and this is because the fact that there is fresh air and nature lights out of bulding which make the students less exhustive. As an example, in our universiy, one of the professors gives his lectures in the yard of university, because he thinks that the lerning ability of students are more in the open spaces.
All in all, Should the universities want to make a great impact on the effeciency of students, they need to spent their boudgets on improving design of sapces, because the students dont need new computers but the need new spaces where are living in them every day. The top universities always have different campus and buliding and it is an witnees on my perspective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07334963325 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92639605246 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525672371638 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5927751692 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.277777778 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362079058561 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103005140328 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813670745713 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197520924017 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875902115774 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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