A university has money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the quality of the technology (for example computers and printers) that it provides for students or it can redesign spaces where students hold club meetings and gather with friends in their spare time to make these areas more comfortable and appealing.
Nowadays, a lot of students in order to achieve a high level of education continue their studies at universities, and universities try to help them to achieve their goals by providing an effective atmosphere. Although some people believe that universities should spend money on making an attractive and beautiful space, personally, I am on the side of people that believe universities should spend their budget to renovate their facilities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, having the most up to date computers will improve students’ knowledge. To be more specific, it is crystal clear that universities should have the last version of computers. This is because most of the important research, which have a lot of benefits for humans’ life, has happened in universities. Moreover, according to the rate of improvement in technology, every day a new model of the computer has been invented by scientists, the previous models cannot work very well compared to the last version. Therefore, it is too important that universities spend money to make themselves up to date and pave the way for their students to do their research in the best way. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. I am a medical school student, and I am working on a project under the supervision of my advisor. The project that I am working on it really needs to use the perfect microscope and supercomputers. Until, last year, I was not able to do anything and improve my research. It was because my university did not have the equipment that I need to do my research, and after one year, they could afford the requested money and buy the equipment that I need, and as a result, I did my research. Therefore, it is obvious that if they spent their money in some unnecessary ways, they could not help me to do my project and improve my knowledge to help humans having better lives.
Moreover, having update computers and printers will save students time. To put it in other words, old versions of computers and printers usually have a lot of problems and errors, and working with them for students is really time-consuming. This because, a lot of students use them in a university, and they are not in good condition. So, whenever, students need to work with them, they have a lot of unpredictable problems. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, we had a printer in our office, and all the students in the office used it to print whatever they want. Due to the fact that this old printer used too much more than its capacity, it usually did not work well. We usually should ask the staff of our university to help us to have some printed paper. Although they usually change its cartridge and serviced it, it did not work well, and it was the main cause of all the students to miss their class and waste their time.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples. I believe that universities should spend their budget to make their equipment update and new. This is because, in this way, they help students to improve their knowledge, and help students to save their time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., and help students to save their time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2618.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70863309353 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78291989364 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429856115108 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3930377054 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.72 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.24 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256253487602 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758816663647 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487528719917 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155476757611 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403276339861 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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