Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, one of the most important issues in humans' life is to find an appropriate and useful way in order to spend their money that make a better life in the future for themselves and their family members. Personally, I strongly believe that it is a great idea that governments spend more money in order to support the arts. I feel this way for two reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To being with, I am of the opinion that if governments spend more money on the arts, in fact, they will provide a chance for people to help themselves to release their distress. To be more specific, according to our busy life we have experienced lots of distresses during one day when we are doing our tasks and activities. So, at the end of the day, we need something to help us to recover ourselves and make us relax and happy. For instance, I am working in a big company and I have lots of tasks during a day that all of them have me to experience lots of distress. So, I used to be an aggressive person until I found that recently, a government institution has started to work near my home and I decided to go there in order to learn music. Therefore, after six months I could play the piano and it really helps me to calm down and forgot any problem.
Moreover, spending more money in order to support arts activities is very useful because it will improve the ability to learn in humans. To put it in other words, people can learn new things easily if they have the ability in any major arts. For example, I have a six years old son and I really like to help him to improve his knowledge and other abilities to have a better life in the future. I have tried to teach him English from last year until now although he was good at learning, in recent two months he learns very easily rather than in the past. I think this is because he started to learn to play the piano at the same time. Therefore, I search on the internet and I found that it is true and according to many research scientists have found that there is a clear correlation between these two activities.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I strongly believe that governments should spend more money on in support of the arts. This is because by this method not only people have this chance to release their distress, but they can learn everything easily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39726027397 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45713868016 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465753424658 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.5676654214 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.294117647 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14791429311 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567753616095 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855377571249 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105785763309 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409366356202 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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