Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Nowadays, most of the high school students, in order to have a high level of education, continue their education at universities after the graduation from their schools. Although some people believe that student should begin their study after high schools without any break, I am on the side of people who strongly believe that student should have at least one year off to have the chance of working. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, one year working/ working for whole year after high school will improve students' self-confidence. To be more specific, during working, students have the chances to make money for themselves or improved their social skills through communicating with different people with a variety of personalities, their social skills will improve. Then, this provide a chance for them to believe in themselves and get ready for a university, which have a completely different atmosphere compare to high schools. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Ten years ago, I finished my study at high school, and my father encouraged me to have one year rest and work with him at this store. Working with my father paved the way for me to have my own salary and income; hence, I had his chance to buy whatever I want. In fact, I was able to make my own decision, and I was not dependent on my father. Moreover, because I used to be a shy person, working in my father store, provided a situation for me to talk with different people in a day and improve my personality. Thus, all of these benefits was too useful for me and enhanced my self-confidence and made me ready for university, which is a place for mature person.
Moreover, having/taking one year off after high school will help students to select a field that they are more interested in. To put it in other words, working after high school make a situation for us to be more aware of our preferences and interests. Therefore, we make a correct decision and will choose a field of study that best fit our purposes, and as a result, we will have a better performance during our education. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, working in my father store helped me to understand about my talent and interest in computer science. One year working there, made me more motivated to know more about information technology and machine learning. My interest in computer science encouraged me to study hard and be a smart student with high GPA during my education, and now, I am so happy because of my correct decision.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I strongly believe that students must have one year off after their schools to have a chance of working. This is because this way not only improves their self-confidence but will help them to have a better decisions for their field of study.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, at least, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2399.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71316306483 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74585070235 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438113948919 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6418377248 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.95 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.45 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239117871091 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875817374198 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917629066399 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163993544682 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075112104057 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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