Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child 5 10 years old 1 Being helpful 2 Being honest 3 Being well organized | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. Being helpful
2. Being honest
3. Being well-organized.

It is very important to pay more attention to young children and do our best to teach them useful things when they are at their first steps in life. Personally, I believe that it has more benefits for young children to learn how to be helpful in their life. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, learning to be helpful will provide a chance for a child to improve his social skills. To be more specific, in order to help other people in a society, we teach our children how to communicate and socialize with others to find their needs, then they have the chance for giving them a hand. Therefore, being helpful indirectly will teach our child to make a friendly relationship with others. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Twenty years ago, before starting school, I went to a kindergarten near my home, which had a lot of children my age, and we enjoyed playing with each other. My father usually encouraged me to help my friends during playing a game and share my stuff with them, even he told me to give them my food. Thus, because I wanted and enjoyed helping them and did what my father wanted, I should make a friendly relationship with them, while they had different manner and personality. So, I learn to befriend children too younger than and older than me.
Moreover, being helpful will improve young children’s self-confidence. To put it in other words, when a child learns to be helpful and effective in his life, he is able to see the effect of his good manner and how others benefit from him. Thus, he knows that there are people that he can solve their problems, and it improves their self-confidence. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, not only sharing my food during lunchtime and helping other young children during play games improve my social skills but have a lot of useful effects on my personality. This was because I did understand that I was able to give some hands to my friend and solve their problems. I can remember that during lunchtime one of the children in our kindergarten did not bring his food and he was too hungry. I shared my food with him, while I was too hungry, shared my food with him and after lunch I still was hungry, but I enjoy helping him.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I strongly believe that young children should learn to be helpful. This is because in this way, not only their social skills will improve but their self-confidence is improved.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1009, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ren too younger than and older than me. Moreover, being helpful will improve you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55119825708 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59722769054 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453159041394 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2876958082 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.45 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.95 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205522570035 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764376470127 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687518793962 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131374262082 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324161102073 0.0645574589148 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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