Some people believe that spending time away from people we care about helps us to improve our relationship with them, because being away from these people makes us realize how important they are to us. Other people believe that to improve our relationships with the people we care about, we should spend as much time with them as possible, because spending time apart can damage or harm a relationship. Which view do you agree with and why?
At least there is one person in our life that we are in love with him or her, and we enjoy spending our time together. Although some people believe that it is a great idea that we spend some time away from our couple, personally, I am on the side of people who strongly believe that we should spend time as much as possible with our girlfriend or boyfriend in order to improve our relationship. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
to begin with, being away from our lovely person make a lot of unnecessary distress for us. To be more specific, when we are not spending time with a person who we care about him, it makes us think too much about him, and it might be possible some bad dreams come to our mind. On the other hand, when we are with a person that is important in our life, we can enjoy and have a lot of fun with each other and there is no need to worry about him. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Ten years ago, I was working in a city too far from my home, and I meet my wife just a week each month. Therefore, during the time that I was not at home, I was worried and missed her. I usually was thinking about her and I was not sure that is she felt good or not. This anxiety did not let me have enough concentration during my work, and as a result, I had a lot of problems with my boss. Therefore, I decided to change my job and find a new job near my home to solve these problems and enjoy more from living with my life.
Moreover, when we spend more time with a person that is important to us, we know each other too much better. To put it in other words, this provides a chance for us to be more aware of each other and know more about our personalities. Therefore, we can do better and have an appropriate reaction in different situations in our life. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, during the time that I work in a city too far from my home, I had some problems with my wife. Although we loved each other too much, during my rest, when I was at home, usually we had some arguments. But, after I changed my job and find a new job near my home, we had this chance to spend more time and know each other better. She did not know that I did not that I am an absent-minded person and usually forgot important things. But this new change pawed the way for her to know me better and did not angry with me.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I strongly believe that in order to know an important person in our life, we should spend more time with him or her. This is because in this way we do not experience unnecessary distress and we know each other better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...will explore in the following essay. to begin with, being away from our lovely ...
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Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was usually
...t home, I was worried and missed her. I usually was thinking about her and I was not sure t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore, at least, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 104.0 43.0788530466 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.08426966292 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29198259635 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.376404494382 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4639956586 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1363636364 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2727272727 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309136431617 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959814784799 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105233573026 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215698749945 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968780235486 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.68 10.9000537634 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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