Some adults believe that, nowadays, children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better (for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
- Limiting the types of television programs and movies their children can watch
- Spending more time talking with their children
- Supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends
Nowadays, due to some complicated reasons, children are more aggressive compared to children who live in the past. Among the above three options, personally, I am on the side of people who strongly believe that parents should spend more time to talk with their children and ask them to be polite. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents have important effects on their children, so children pay more attention to them and obey their words. To be more specific, children are really dependent on their parents in many ways in their life, and they believe in their parents’ manner and words, and parents are their only mature reference for them; hence, if parents choose an appropriate method to talk with their children, they will solve children's problems. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. I have a seven years old son, and recently he shows some unusual manners and uses bad words when he speaks with his friends. Moreover, I have a good relationship with him, and during his life, I have tried to be one of his best friends. Therefore, I went out with him to a park, where he really likes to be, and during our visit, I talk to him about this problem and told him that how much it is important to be kind and polite with others in our life. I know that he accepts me because he believes in me as his friend and my works have a lot of effects on him.
Moreover, talking with our children will provide a chance for them to release their distress, which might be the causes of some of their impolite manner. To put it in other words, children experience many new and unusual problems and situations in their life, which makes a lot of problems and stress for them. Therefore, parents are the main person in their life that can make them calm and easy, and encourage them to control their manners. For instance, as I mentioned in the example in the past paragraph, I knew that the main reasons for my son’s bad manners. He starts school this year, and he is not used to be apart from his mother for a long time. Moreover, he is an introverted and shy person, and as a result, communicating with new children make a lot of stress for him. Therefore, visiting the park and spending time together makes him calm and helps him to release his distress, and after that, he can control himself.
In conclusion, according to all the reasons and examples, I strongly believe that parents should spend more time with their children to help them. This is because not only do their children pay more attention to them, but they are able to make their children calm.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, apart from, for instance, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52291666667 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41608380184 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0739208831 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.263157895 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2631578947 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212381614049 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844468293147 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062773976935 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169701229514 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325808921194 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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