Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5-10 behave better (for example by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward others). Which one action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
-limiting the types of television programs and movies their children can watch.
- spending more time talking with their children.
- supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends.
It comes with no doubt that the way that children behave in childhood is of an important impact on their adolescence threatening. A group of parents believes in restrict punishments to help their kids understanding the correct way of behaving, although other groups prefer friendlier methods. I am of the opinion that talking with children more frequently is an efficient technique. I believe in this for two reasons that I explore in this essay.
To commence with, talking with kids helps parents find out how the kid learned these unaccepted behaviors. When we spend more time talking with our children, we have sufficient time to talk about different things, including their friends and games. As a result, we can find out the reason for their disrespectful threat. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My son, Aria used to act like he hates everybody and says rude words when he was 7. I started spending more time talking to him and even playing. After a while I could find out he had learned these words and habits from our neighbor’s son, who they used to play together every single evening. Therefore, I could help Aria finding new friends, and finally the problem solved due to talking to him and understanding his behavior reasons.
In addition, parents who talk with their kids more frequently, are able to teach their children the correct acting ways. Children usually listen to our advice when they feel more comfortable with us and it comes just when we have more and more time talking together. For instance, my son Aria that I mentioned above, started listening to me after a while after we were talking more and more. It was incredible, I could have a complete influence on his way of acting. In the end I could teach him the correct manner and behavior little by little in our conversations. I hope all parents be able to make such a relationship with their kids and affect their behavior.
In conclusion I want to state having more time speaking to our kids, we can have a much better influence on them. It is because first, we can find out why they are not acting kindly. Second, we can teach them the proper behavior that we seek.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70866141732 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62362183719 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509186351706 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5089252672 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4285714286 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197252247011 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625871406006 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311837228264 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131132800042 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198047668255 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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