Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between
semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month
during the break.
a. Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for example,
students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
b. Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to
improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work with
primary school children who need help with their homework.
Which one do you prefer? Present reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a student life, every moment is precious. Whenever there is a long break between two semesters, students wonder how to use this break efficiently. Personally, I prefer to volunteer to work on a project and gain experience rather than taking courses which are not relevant to my major. I feel this way for two reasons which I explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, work experience is very important for students in their future life. During a semester, students are often busy studying and doing their homework. So it is very hard for them to work and pass their courses successfully. However, when you fill in an application for a job, there is always a question about your job experiences. In addition, companies prefer to choose an experienced person for a job position. Therefore, I believe students should use any chance to gain work experience.
Moreover, in a project which aims to improve the aspects of your city, you can understand how to utilize whatever you have learned in your classes at the university in your real life. To be more specific, students usually just pass the courses without the knowledge of how the things they have learned can practically be used. Also, when you understand that things you have learned are practical, you are motivated to pursuit your studies more carefully. For example, when I was at the third grade undergraduate student, my university planned an internship for us in the summer. During that internship, I learned that how the courses which I passed are related to this practical project. Thus, the next semester I studied harder and with a broader insight of my major.
In conclusion, as a university student, I think a long break between two semesters can be efficiently used by doing projects which leads to make an aspect of acity life better. This is because of the value of gaining work experience as an student in finding a good job in future and motivation to study harder and more careful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of acity life better. This is because of the value of gaining work experience as ...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...the value of gaining work experience as an student in finding a good job in future...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86646884273 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75867696279 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516320474777 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5350042388 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1111111111 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282220623477 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908236296222 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559787144336 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183330019844 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325706239116 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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