A university wants to improve the quality of life for students by making a new area in the dormitories. Which of the following do you think would be the most effective in achieving this goal?
- an area for studying
- an area for exercising
-an entertainment area
Decisions of educational organizations are capable of heavily influencing students’ life; these judgements should be reflected adequately before they are put on action. Personally, I believe that building exercises facility at the dormitories is extremely beneficial for students living there and the university itself. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, university can facilitate learners to carry out physical movements in order to improve their health and concentration, in turn, grades of classes. If universities do not offer facilities designed for doing workout, learners will be unable to improve their health by regularly accomplishing exercises. Therefore, they will probably start developing some disorders such as anxiety or other troubles related to lack of movement. On the other hand, pupils who study at postsecondary institutions which provide exercise places can avoid these problems easily by doing trainings. Moreover, they can enhance their grade because they do not have to expend time for going to hospitals by virtue of health problems, and because their concentration will be improved. Consequently, the university will help students to have satisfactory grades and health if the institution builds the sports place.
Secondly, training locations have less alternatives, compared to places for learning and entertainment. There are many options for undergraduates to have fun with others, and study their lesson. On the other hand, opportunity to carry out workout is limited to certain places such as fitness. Therefore, the organizations need provide students with chance to do exercises because they nearly have not alternative choices, especially for ones living at their campus. For example, there is no place for learning, doing exercises, and having fun at my university. In fact, I am managing everything aside from workout. I usually do my assignments at my room, and have fun with friends at café or other places. However, finding another choice to accomplish body training is my significant problem because I cannot do exercise neither near to campus nor at my room. If my university had built sport facility, I would have not confront such difficulties.
In summation, I am of the opinion that the university need to construct the facility designed for doing exercises. This is because exercise is good for students’ health, and other alternatives for doing exercise is few.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47545219638 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0759362582 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545219638243 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4849242423 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.95 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1952419962 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714535226115 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574538746022 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151863418804 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480788546703 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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