Nowadays, education has become the top concern of modern citizens. Recently, there is a heated debate on the university's investment to improve students' life quality, some claim that the university should spend money on studying rooms or entertainment places. As for me, I believe that they should spend money on providing a fitting room, especially considering the benefits to people's health and interpersonal relationship.
On the one hand, having a place to work out right in the dormitory would be super convenient, and beneficial to students' health. This is because students today routinely sprint through jam-packed daily schedules, tackling big serving of academic work and plus giant helpings of extracurricular activity. And in order to relieve such stress, many studies have proven that exercise is a very effective way. If there is an exercise room right under the dormitory, youngsters can easily develop a fitness habits and improve their mental and physical condition. For example, several years ago, I studied my master's program at Pepperdine University and live on campus. At that time, I was particularly grateful that there was a small exercise room in the middle of our dormitory, which was free for residents to use. Although it was not as good as many off-campus paid gyms, it was situated near hands. I would go to the gym almost every day to work out. After finished, I could go straight to my room to take a shower, and refresh myself, from head to toe. In a word, had it not been for this little place easy to access, I would never have maintained my fitness under the pressure of master's programs.
On the other hand, the other two options are not as necessary as some people may consider. For one thing, numerous seats for studying have been provided in school, making building another room only for quiet study a waste of money. As most college students may notice, normally every university has a library, or a special room for students to study, after all, the main function of the school is to help students with their learning. Even during finals, those seats may go quickly, but since it is exam week, most of the students are focused on preparing for tests, so it's easy for the dorm room to naturally become a quiet study room. For another, there are so many ways to entertain when in college, leaving the amusement room probably unused. Take me for example. When I was an undergraduate, my college was in the center of the city, so whenever I had time, I met up with my friends to hang out nearby, such as watching movies, going to concerts, and even having a short trip on weekend. To be honest, when it comes to having fun, the dorm could hardly jump into my mind, not to mention the thought of having a place inside where you can supposedly entertain yourself.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I still maintain that the university should spend money providing an exercise place.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, after all, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, for one thing, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2440.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82213438735 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63475723054 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5395256917 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4146970659 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.909090909 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355114437105 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922872778244 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801616821188 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227664410457 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462156714554 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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