We can learn more from people at a higher level than us (like teachers) than from people who are at the same level as us
Some people may learn more from people at a higher level than us. Others may feel more comfortable from people at the same level. In my opinion, learning from people who have more experience is better. The reasons for my view are philosophical and personal.
First, from a philosophical point of view, learning from individuals with more experience and education allow us to cut the mistakes that we would have in the learning curve. As an example, learning a new skill or a language is difficult. If we are able to know from the beginning what is correct or incorrect, it will help us to improve faster. Furthermore, if the teacher is able to give us only the tasks which will enable us to gain more experience and learn from our mistakes, it will be easier to learn the new skill or language. For example, when I was learning how to play the guitar, I tried to learn from a friend. However, there were some parts of a song that I was not able to do it properly as my friend has never learned how to play it. As a result, I had to take some lessons with a teacher. He explained to me that I was doing a few things wrong and he provided me good examples of how to improve my technique.
Secondly, I really enjoy learning from someone who has already done something that I am trying to do. Watching a professional achieving what you are practicing is very enriching as you can see yourself doing it if you keep going. For example, when I was learning how to surf, I took some classes at a surfing school in Sydney. Being able to see my teacher surfing was amazing as he taught me the basics and the steps that I need to do to be like him. Surfing is a difficult and dangerous sport. In my experience, learning from someone who has more experience, gives me trust and confidence to keep going. In addition, I have more fun as I am able to share my feeling with someone who has already felt like during the learning process.
In conclusion, learning from people at a higher level than me, it is better than learning from people who are at the same level for the reasons that I provided above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37084398977 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54445756441 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445012787724 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6168376415 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.45 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488044149342 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156311416242 0.076458572812 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189232548025 0.0737576698707 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.388841888858 0.150856017488 258% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.206383998194 0.0645574589148 320% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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