we should be optimistic when we fail.
An ongoing debate exists as to whether we should be optimistic when we fail. As far as I am concern, being optimistic when we fail is very critical to achieve the success next time, because it could help us get out of the failure or sorrow and set out to our goal again.
Most importantly, the failure or sorrow should not be only thing we got in the failure, and the most important things, which is experience from the failure, will come when we clam down after failure. My cousin Joe may serve as an example for this point. Last summer, he felt so depressed because he had failed his math tests, but he always got one fifth top grade in the class and never got such a worse result in his study. With my comfort, he became calm down and started to ponder why he would got such a failure in this math test. Finally, he found that he had missed some contents in the book, which he believed that it should be included in the next exam not this time before the exam. From then on, he was not sad anymore and learnt a lesson from this failure.
Additionally, being optimistic could lead us to keep in a good mood and an open mindset to make some progress. My experience may shed some light to this point. When I was in the high school, my teacher told me not to be sorrow when I got failure at some point, because it should not be called a failure but should be called "not yet". The individuals always try to make a progress every day to get closer to our goal. If one way is not working out, it means we can find another way to get there and it is not necessary to immerse ourselves in sorrow. Being optimistic can keep us in the good mood during the lonely and difficult journey to our goal. Until now, I still keep my teacher's word in my mind as a principle to find a way to my goal.
Admittedly, there are lots of sorrow or tears even heart broken when we got fail with great effort to our goal. However, sorrow or tears can lead us not to success, but to the heart broken or even giving up, which could be a disaster to the path for success. Therefore, being optimistic when we fail is essential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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An ongoing debate exists as to whether we should be optimistic when we fail. A...
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... an example for this point. Last summer, he felt so depressed because he had fail...
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...down and started to ponder why he would got such a failure in this math test. Final...
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...ster to the path for success. Therefore, being optimistic when we fail is essenti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21975308642 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25355685939 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479012345679 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7166275339 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9444444444 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404007368813 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150645659155 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.202635677499 0.0737576698707 275% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311135159602 0.150856017488 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153512712199 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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