knowing about what are happening in world is critical no matter whether they may affect your life.
With the rapid development of society, some people suggest that learning about what has happening around the world is critical even if they may not affect your life. In my opinion, I cannot too agree to this view, because of the unknown or potential relationship among events, broadening our horizon and forming critical thinking.
Most importantly, some events happened around world may exert its influence to your life, because everything in world seems to be connected. For example, it is widely-known that the 2008 financial crisis had brought the destructive impact on economy all over the world. However, at the beginning, people around our community did not care about how financial crisis is happened in US, because they believed that it was none of their businesses. In several weeks later, financial crisis had spread all over the world, and thus those people who had no concerned about financial crisis started to worry about their jobs, business or properties, because of increasing unemployment rate, industry depression and gloomy consuming market. Everything happened in such a short time, so if the individual was not concerned what had happened in the world, he may totally fall behind the society.
Furthermore, knowing some events happened every day could broaden our horizon and enlarge our common sense. It is widely-accepted that those events happened every day can always to be a safe topic for a small talk with strangers, working partners or new friends. Therefore, knowing some events happened every day is a great way to get better communications and facilitate the relationship between different people. In China, Some taxi drivers are always paying attentions to the radio news, not only getting the traffic situation, but also knowing some events happened every day. With listening so much news in radio, they could tend to have a small talk with the passengers about news, which could make less boring and relaxing atmosphere during the journey. If the taxi driver has made friends with the passengers, the passengers may be more likely to take the same taxi next time.
Admittedly, it could be tired of getting in touch with numerous events after heavy burden of work. However, getting to know of numerous events every day brings us tons of benefits, like helping us keep up the pace with society, getting more topic to communicate with others and finally forming a more comprehensive critical thinking mode. My sister may be a case to this point. With often discussing news with my dad, she has got the great progress in her article writing, from B- score to A score.
Finally, it is safe to conclude that knowing about what are happening in world is critical no matter whether they may affect your life.
- knowing about what are happening in world is critical no matter whether they may affect your life. 70
- TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently 60
- it is enough for the government to educate people about the importance of living a balanced and healthy life style 73
- workers are more satisfied with the numerous different tasks in their jobs rather than with similar tasks 76
- young people can be more easily affected by opinions of these celebrities 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...fect your life. In my opinion, I cannot too agree to this view, because of the unknown or...
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...laxing atmosphere during the journey. If the taxi driver has made friends with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04845814978 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62392404451 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528634361233 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.539508997 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.333333333 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364872867139 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129429661648 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.198405353066 0.0737576698707 269% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305608819155 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.28301346695 0.0645574589148 438% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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