With the emergence of modern technology and the ever-increasing pace of its improvements, people have been provided with a plethora of options from which they can opt, in order to make their lives easier and more convenient, and companies introduce new products every day. While some people prefer to buy new products right away, others, however, stand on the other side of the continuum, they wait for a while and then decide. As for my opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, people can be lured into buying things they don't need by smart advertising. By targeting people's unconscious thoughts, advertisers brainwash people and take away their freedom to make choices. Companies use various sophisticated methods to encourage people to buy their products. As a result, people end up buying things that they don't even need, and this damages their financial stability. Therefore, individuals can save their money by spending it reasonably, and waiting for a while until the product is fully released. The rational action in these situations is to wait and see how the product actually is, get feedback from other people, and then decide whether it is necessary to obtain it. By waiting, we can substantially annihilate consumerism from our society, which can significantly enhance our quality of life.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that we can make better decisions about products if we wait and see how products actually are. It's crystal clear that ads are unreliable since they use visual appeal to seduce people. Ads create unrealistic expectations by exaggerating and misleading facts. It takes a while for people to comment on a product and tell how they actually feel. In the beginning, people are hyped and do not see the flaws of the product. As time goes on, people realize that the product is not perfect and give a more coherent opinion. Hence, we can buy the product that suits our needs and is perfect for us by comparing it with other similar products.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons into account, I strongly believe that individuals should not buy new products immediately, on the ground that by doing so they can manage their money considerably better, as well as they can decide more precisely if a product is actually good or not.
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..., people end up buying things that they dont even need, and this damages their finan...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, as for, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02173913043 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83053553831 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9643990275 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.421052632 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172324646359 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561577250948 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428525430505 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115178385802 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425138010979 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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