When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country; others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons support your answer.
Advantages and disadvantages of new customs in a new country has been a controversial issue in the community lately. While some people claim that new customs have some significant downsides others maintain that they have a number of undeniable benefits . Although both sides have some prejudices, I’m of the opinion that adapt to new customs offer three valuable advantages. That adopt new customs get facilitate to live in a new country, other it can expand social or friend group, finally it transfer this acknowledge from now to next generations. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible detail and examples in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, people convert their country easily in this era. They move between the country and continents in order to make better life conditions. But, they ignore traditions and customs many times also they reject to adopt new customs. I prefer to adopt new customs that adopt new land or country. Beucause people need to job and Money, they should continue their life. If they do not adopt new customs, community try to exclusion them.
Secondly, nowadays the earth passing through a sensitive times which affect all community. People should adapt new customs, traditions and rules so that have better life condition. In a new country, people need to be socialize when they spend time in outsides. Although they know language, rules or tradition, they are not enough. They should be talkative and expand friendships. Other people observe their behaviours many times. If they want have good and big friend groups, they must adapt their traditions and customs. Because people like knowledgable people about their country.
Finally, people not responsible only their life also they excited future generations. They may stay long time in new land, so they have some children. It looks like good possibility. İf they feel responsible to next generations, they transfer all knowledge to them. Their children learn customs in schools or social groups that related behaviours. Parents bring up knowledgeable children who can live comfortable. Because ın many country, people look conflict of generations some part of community. People keep up with their thinks and minds.
To sum up, many county government face to face conflict of generations in some part of community. They can surpass with these solutions to problems. New adapt programs can help people who want better life in a different land.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23737373737 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6922675105 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507575757576 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3224411596 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.1333333333 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96666666667 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241477681023 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712014466262 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526084444943 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142348970438 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474546241823 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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