Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Advantages and disadvantages of financial support in the colleges and universities have been a controversial issue in the community lately. While some people claim that financial aid must be equal conditions to all branches, others states that it should be different. Both of two sides offer undeniable benefits. Although both sides have several pros and cons, I am of the opinion that financial support must be different. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible and examples in the following paragraphs.
Universities and colleges have limited budget that expenditure for students. On the other hand some popular universities have billions dollars budget. For example, MIT and Oxford have more afford than others. They may have big budget but, all educational institution need carefull budget plan. Some colleges are known with success in the sport branches. For instance Duke University has a basketball team. They are talented and ability about basketball. They have many championships and medals. İf Duke paid equal expenditure in the school, it might not success in the sport. Because, Duke has many training areas and basketball saloon. Other example is New York University. İt has fame regarding swimming. Many swimmers study in NYU thanks to different support. İt behaves different all branches, because science, sport and researching entail significant factors. They have many grant succes.
On the other hand, Universities and colleges should receive financial support to continue some programs. Many people donate millions dollars to educational institution. But, they offer some obligation about financial support. İt entails different approach among grants in aid. Some universities prefer to do research medication. Because philanthropists want it . Many medical institution are founded via donation. They aim to be temporarily in the sector. So they need more plants, researching plants. For example, Medipol University in Istanbul creates significant opportunity in the field of medical sciences.
To sum up, many colleges and universities have different aim. They are found different part of world. They provide some chance to students. They may have limited budget, but they have freedom of choice where they financial support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
.... They provide some chance to students. They may have limited budget, but they have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so, while, for example, for instance, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61560693642 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89699475799 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537572254335 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8079940126 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.1470588235 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.1764705882 20.6045352989 49% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.67647058824 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149157271851 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392195360625 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498856939874 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104981175405 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459031367609 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.84 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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