Children should be occupied at all times and should never be left to their own devices.
For the last years, community has undergone radical change which related with technological and daily life. This progressive changes which affects the children largely. But they learn faster than our childhood, also they have some technological device. While some people argue that this has numerous advantages, others maintain that it has a number of undeniable drawbacks. Although both sides have several pros and cross, I am of the opinion that parents are responsible their adults. Millenium era has advantages children that should not be ignore. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible details and example in the following paragraphs.
People have same opinion wherever you are find. All communities have undeniable traditions that is found largely place in community. Many parents can not stand apart their children. They interest every hours in a day, thanks to technological devices. Children observe very well to parents behaviours, and they imitate easily. İf parents spend time some devices more than few hours, adult perceives different. For instance, parents use mobile phone part of daily life that children observe it, and they have tendency to implement over life. They discover internet world so that open the digital games. They spend time too much on internet which effects harsh. Parents should control a regular period in order to protect children from the temporally results. They face a new dangerous that is known mobile game. İt is blue whale which gives some missions for children. They do regularly and earn some points. But they get addicted it that affects whole daily life. Moreover, some children try to kill themselves results of game.
Family life is important in the all community. Although digital world has serious advantages, it takes significant negative sides. Parents can not interest their children enough. They have some alternative solutions, but they do not know. Children try to interest hobbies. For instance, sports and cheese improve ability skills. Sports contribute physical endurance, other side cheese improve brain capability. Parents should not observe children when they do these activity. Because they do group activity that they do not spend lonely time. They have chance to improve mental and physical skills. Thus, children can focus higher capability. They are aware of true or false things.
To sum up, our world live a milestone todays; people get slog away to adapt this change. They should carefull every time. But, they need not do harsh conditions. Some solutions get easier and happier their life, if they tend to open minded. They behave with conciousness changes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32227488152 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50531655435 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559241706161 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.6003584229 189% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 20.1344086022 50% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.774326598 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.5897435897 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.8205128205 20.6045352989 53% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.53846153846 5.45110844103 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141053255673 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409692011256 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602603578394 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939622103242 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142588965365 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.33 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.39 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.0 10.0537634409 60% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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