whether movies and television carry more positive effects for young or more negative impacts
It goes without any shadowing of doubt that movies and televisions bring people a lot of advantages and disadvantages since they hold different opinions and concepts. One of the heated controversies regarded to pros and cons of movies and television is that whether they carry more positive effects for young or more negative impacts. Many people are of the opinion that they have considerable positive effects so that their negative effect cannot be seen, while others think otherwise. I, personally, subscribe to the idea that their negative impacts outweigh obviously positive ones. Not only do they waste the priceless time of young, but also they cause young to obtain wrong information and point of view.
To begin with, considering the prime time of people, youth, and the way of using it which can flourish or languish future of young people, spending the time to watching every movie and television is a big waste of time. To clarify this notion, young people have a lot to do all of which are necessary to do as far as their success is concerned; like their schools' task, their secondary activities like their art classes and so forth. Considering the addictive essence of movies and television, students spend a lot of their time to watch them. They could use such a great period of time to learn a lot of things because their mental abilities are at the peak in this period of their lives. They can adapt different skills by participating in workshops activities, social activities and so more. Psychologically speaking, as we grow, our mental ability decreases and it is unavoidable. The memory of the youngs cannot be comparable with older' one. For instance, my sister and I held different approaches in our youth. She always watched movies and television; in contrast, I attended to different class like painting class, volleyball class and so more. These priceless experiences helped me to find my interest, and now I am a successful painter. By the contrast, my sister lost that precious time at the expense of watching some movies, and now she has not a prosperous life.
Secondly, it is not to mention that in this modern life, everything is in the hand of powerful people around the world like wealthy companies, political people and so forth, and the concept of movies and television's programs are no exception. They often get advantage from some incorrect information, concept, and reports on television. Considering such a frustrating fact, we cannot find accurate and reliable information via television and so more. This unavoidable occurrence brings people, especially young people, irrecoverable influences. Young people are more exposed to incorrect knowledge since they have not achieved enough experiences throughout their lives, unlike older ones that are equipped with a good wisdom to separate correct and incorrect information thanks to their innumerable experiences. If the youngs fellow movies and television, they would find some negative ideas most of which can affect adversely their lives.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that the movies and television negative effect is really noticeable in young people. They not only waste the beyond the price time of people young but also give them misunderstanding about real life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...watch them. They could use such a great period of time to learn a lot of things because their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in contrast, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2761.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13197026022 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82399758173 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503717472119 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2513789026 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.041666667 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302808590725 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874502345888 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123179414399 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213613691837 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127395714954 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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