Which area the government should fund to improve children’s education?
1).hiring more teachers to teach in a small class
2).preschool education before kindergarten
3).providing some training courses so that teachers can be more professional
Children are the future of the world. They are the most important components of our society. They take on the responsibility of developing a better world. Therefore, government is responsible for creating the best atmosphere for children to grow. Conventional wisdom generally believes that improving the preschool education before kindergarten or providing some training courses can be good choices, since in this way, children will be more well-prepared and enthusiastic for the future school life. Hiring more teachers to teach children in a small class, on the other hand, are usually ignored by government and relative organization, because it will be a huge financial consume and may not work out. However, based on my own experiences on this issue, I prefer to endorse that hiring more teachers to teach in a small class can be definitely an excellent choice. In order to clarify my point of view, I will state from two perspectives as followings:
First off, it is convenient for teachers to teach in a small class. Small class means that children’s number is not large. In this way, teachers have the opportunity to take good care of every child. If teachers need to look after too many children, they may be distracted from some emergencies. In this regard, I often provide the example of my kindergarten teacher, who was a pretty and patient girl. She payed all her attention on care for us. However, one day, one of my classmates caught a serious fever. His situation was relatively bad. What’s worst is my teacher did not aware him, since she need to prepare the lunch for us. The class had so many children that my teacher consume much time to accomplish her work. And when she was aware of my classmate’s terrible condition, he has fainted. Fortunately, because my teacher sent him to hospital on time, he was recovered soon.
Furthermore, in a small class, children will have more opportunities to make true friends. We all know that children may feel uncomfortable in a narrow environment. They will sit in their own seat for a long time and refuse to talk to their classmates which will damage children’s growth physically and mentally. For instance, when my little brother David was four years old, my parents sent him to a kindergarten. At first, we believed that David will behave in school as freely as at home. However, several days after, David’s teacher said that David was a bit of restrained and shy in school and he had got no friends yet. We asked David about this dilemma and he said that he felt relatively uncomfortable in the big class. After he was changed to a small class, he behaved much more zealous.
In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that hiring more teachers to teach in a small class can be a better choice, since it will be beneficial for both teachers and children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 823, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...iring more teachers to teach in a small class can be definitely an excellent choice. ...
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Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...iring more teachers to teach in a small class can be a better choice, since it will b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86409736308 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91028471582 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503042596349 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.9986772325 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6428571429 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6071428571 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304324276389 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761694880672 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797273443953 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213168920571 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908435273047 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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