Children's education is fundamental to the future of a generation and to the development of a country. Some people argue that hiring more teachers and creating a smaller class are the most important things to do, others hold that preschool education is far more improtant and can have a greatly influnence on children thought their lives. However, from me perspective, providing training courses for teachers can be more helpful than the other two methods.
Firstly, hiring more teahcers cannot make sure that kids are taken good care. Smaller class size will certainly help kids gain more attentions from teachers which seems to lead to more help for kids. Nevertheless, whether attentions from a teacher is a good thing or bed thing for a kid is highly depend on the teachers. The professional knowledge can decide wheater or not the teacher is able to handle problems that bring in the table. For instance,suppose a sensitive kid get a bed grade because her classmates made fun of her so she couldn't concertate on her study, then how the teacher deal with the problem matters. If the teacher blamed the kids and told her she was lazzy, the situation get worse and she maybe not confident anymore. In this case, the kid can be better off without the attention from her teacher who does more harm than good.
In addition, preschool education can be harmful as children may be too yong to get ready for shcool. At the age of 2 or 3, many kids may not be able to understand why they have to be seperated from their parents and are brought into a totally strange environment. That make cause a feeling of abandant thus could hurt kids deeply. Meanwhile, the kids are also not ready for school materals and could not do well in shchool. When I was 12, I had role-play game with my yonger brother who was about 3. I pretended that I was the teacher in school and tried to techer him some easy stuff. My little brother was made to seat still and listen to me. It turned out that he could not learn nothing and could not even stand to stay in one place for more than 5 mintues. After 10 mintutes or so, he cried not to play and run away.
To sum up, providing training classes is a better ways to help children;s education as hiring more teachers may do more harm than good and children may not ready for preshcool education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'causes'.
Suggestion: causes
... totally strange environment. That make cause a feeling of abandant thus could hurt k...
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Suggestion:
...to techer him some easy stuff. My little brother was made to seat still and liste...
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Message: Double negation. You probably should say 'anything'.
Suggestion: anything
.... It turned out that he could not learn nothing and could not even stand to stay in one...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57416267943 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50444992119 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533492822967 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7060119 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30713621309 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921717699573 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824588513959 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224564607899 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890554535146 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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