It is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family.
Conventional wisdom generally believes that it is better for a person to work for the business for his or her own family, since working for own family generally means that one can avoid the likelihood to get hurt or be punished by some unfriendly leaders or co-workers. Therefore, people will not break their confidence. Working for other people’s business, on the other hand, is usually believed to be negative by many people, no matter we are speaking of the relationships between workers, stipends and so on. Nevertheless, considering my own experiences, I have a totally different perspective on this issue and prefer to endorse that working for other people’s business may be a better choice. In order to clarify my point of view, I will state from two aspects as followings:
First off, it is a good opportunity for people to exercise themselves throughly. Many people always believes that he or she has been mature enough to get out of their parents’ control, and they have the ability to take their family’s business. Therefore, providing such people the opportunity to working in a totally strange business can test if he or she is mature enough. In this regard, I have a typical example to share, which is a story about myself. When I was graduated form university, I once thought I was the best in the world. And it is time to do something special. I talked to my dad and requested him to arrange a job in his company. However, after hearing what I have said, my dad refused my request and he proposed that I was not mature enough to get a job in his family. Instead, he suggested me to find a job in the market on my own. After I strived to find a job and worked for my boss for a year, I started to know how weak was I and the knowledge I had to learn was still infinite. Finally, after long time’s exercise, I was sure that I can mange my work, instead of orally.
Furthermore, working for other people’s business is beneficial for people to extend their network of relationships. People can make more friends, who may improve one’s work efficiency. Walking out of your narrow loop and meeting more people can definitely be an interesting and audacious thing. I usually provided my dad’s experience at this point. Once graduated from university, my grandpa asked my dad to work for our own family’s business, my dad refused and decided to do something on his own. He managed to know people, find the market’s rule and be successful by himself. After my grandpa retired, my dad took his positions and my family’s business has been more prosperous. Once my family’s business met a serious problem, my dad decided to ask help from an old friend, who knew my father when he was still working for others. The people helped my dad. And my family’s business walked out of woods finally.
In a nutshell, from what has been stated above, we can safely draw the conclusion that working for the business owned by other people is a better choice because people can improving themselves and broaden his or her network of relationships.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, speaking of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2567.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77137546468 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94373153337 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468401486989 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1374917658 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7307692308 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34615384615 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346764455749 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104188889796 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112814761819 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260716040451 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967447980558 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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