Businesses have always been playing an important role in human beings’ lives since it can pave the way of success for individuals’ lives. In this regard, some people believe that they should work for businesses which are owned by others than to work for the businesses of their own families; however I have enough reasons to object to this point of view, and I will illustrate two of which in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, it is a popular belief about family members that says birds of a feather flock together, so it is more beneficial for people to work for their own families’ businesses. To put it in a more vivid picture, people from a family often grow together, thus they are familiar with each other’s features. As a result, working together, they can improve their businesses more effectively. As a way of illustration, take a sun who works for his father. They know each other very well since they have been together all the time. As a result, they can provide the best basic condition for another one to complete the work, which means their work will be done quickly. On the other hand, as they are cognizant of each other’s personality, they can put an end to their works when one of them is not in a good mood. This can help him or her mentally, and he or she will work better during the other day.
Secondly, forgiveness is a significant character which every businessman should have to be successful, and people from one family can forgive each other easily. Hence, working for the businesses of one’s own family can be better. To clarify this point, when people can forgive each other, they will have the courage to implement new methods of doing different works. Consequently, it is more likely that they find new ways with which they can refine their businesses. Take Kalleh, for example. Two brothers have found their dairy product company. When they are asked to describe their way of success, they considered forgiveness as the most essential factor of their improvement. The younger brother made a big mistake long time ago, and he spoiled a considerable amount of milk when he taught that he can use a new method to increase their products. Although the older brother could punish the younger one because of his mistake, he decided to forgive him. Having forgiving his brother, he understood that his brother’s way had a small flaw, so they repair it, and they produce a lot of distinctive products by means of that method.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that people should work for businesses owned by their own families. It is due to the fact that, not only do people know each other’s qualities better, but they also can forget each other’s mistake easily, which can improve their productivity as soon as possible.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77319587629 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60224156747 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492783505155 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3229325166 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.227272727 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279959063238 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112766369941 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139358007867 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229708235208 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775665069096 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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