Which do you prefer with the same rate of pay, an interesting and challenging job with less vacation or a job with more vacation time but less fun?
With the development of technology these days, many jobs have been creating. There are some jobs that people do not work a lot. On the other hand, other jobs required people to toil, but people are interested in fields associated with jobs. If people have to choose a styling job between an industrious but interesting job and a job that are not sedulous, some people think that the easier job is better than another one. However, the exhausting job is better for people because it can be helpful for their future careers and people can enlarge their relationships with experts.
First of all, hard jobs can assist people’s future career to be successful. If people work in their fields despite a degree of work-strength, they can learn new techniques or master new skills. Also, conglomerates or authorized public organizations want to employ people who have an experience that they work in similar fields to the companies and the organizations. This is because the employees tend to make fewer errors, which is profitable to the places. For example, a lot of data of people who are hired by large companies shows that generally, they had worked in the same field. In addition, if people want to found their own companies, they can be funded by the investors easily. The most important factor for investors to support financially is trust. This is made by the CEO’s personal history. This is almost impossible if people get comfortable works.
Moreover, people can widen their relationships with professional people. To be specific, typically, strenuous and intrigued jobs required people to interact with other people. For example, in my case, I worked in the lab as a researcher. Even though, a natural scientist is an arduous job. Also, I could not do anything if I did not work with other experts. This is because some projects requested us to deal with huge equipment. Also, even if we do not need to cope with big things, most of the studies are progressed. Then, during the experiments, I had to communicate with other members, which allowed me to get along with them.
In conclusion, backbreaking jobs are more meaningful than other choices. People can be aided in terms of future careers. This is because many places or people want to take on or embark money on people who served in the near field to them. Also, it is beneficial to broaden their relationships with specialists in people’s fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91219512195 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79683789324 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492682926829 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2359338145 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4615384615 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7692307692 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73076923077 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214189832515 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072432443439 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06233066614 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154638117553 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989756356191 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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