In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce its spending?
Arts, Scientific research, parks and public gardens.
Some people think that in times of an economic crisis, governments have to reduce spending money on arts and making parks or public gardens. However, I disagree with the idea that the government should spend less money on arts and making parks for the following two reasons. First, governments do not have to spend a lot of money on supporting scientific research. Also, parks and gardens help to increase the economy of local communities. Lastly, the arts can make people reduce stress.
First of all, governments are not responsible for supporting scientific research. To be specific, scientific research is already well supported by other places such as universities and private companies. Thus, governments don’t need to be an additional supporter especially if it has no practical use. Let me bring up my personal story as an example. I work as an engineer at a large corporation in Korea. My job is to come up with innovative ideas and create products to release in the future. Many of my ideas and sample products will never be released, but I continue to research because I’m getting paid for it by the company. Once they decide on a product and start selling it they will make a lot of money so they don’t worry about investments. Hence, there is absolutely no need for extra funding from the government for my research.
Second, parks help the economy of local communities improve. What this means is that making parks is helpful for the environment, and cleaner environments can be beneficial for agriculture, fishing and even tourism. Let me bring my town’s story as an example. I live in a small town near a big city. We usually depended on tourism. However, because of the air pollution from the city, tourists did not visit my town, which made us be more difficult economically. Also, people tended to move to the big city because there were not many jobs in the town. One day, people in our town council started to make parks and gardens. Within a year, our town became very clean and this brought many tourists. This created new jobs, which boosted the economy of the town.
Lastly, the arts make people work more efficiently by reducing stress. This is because people today are under a lot of stress and pressure due to this competitiveness of today’s society. By doing art activities, people can forget about their stress and be refreshed, which helps people do their work more efficiently. Also, working more efficiently, the economy gets better. According to a study done by JYP university, people who work after doing art activities can produce items 80% per hour more than people who just focus on working. Also, according to another study, if people can produce more items, the economy of a country will increase due to increasing trades. This clearly shows that the arts help people to relieve their stress, which is helpful for the economy.
In conclusion, arts can reduce stress and parks improve the economy of local communities. Also, scientific research is already supported financially. In this regard, I strongly insist that governments have to spend less money on scientific research than arts and parks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, second, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69421169191 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479323308271 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.470978439 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4117647059 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6470588235 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255692263486 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685574896972 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759990522494 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177096076027 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130379824753 0.0645574589148 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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