Which of the following classes should all high school students take? cook/ financial management/ fixing a car
People often possess different perspectives on what class high school students should take. Some argue that high school students should take a cooking class, others a financial management class, and still others an auto repair class. For me, I state that high school students should take a cooking class because of health, social life, and money.
First of all, students care about their health, and taking a cooking class can improve their health. Take my friend, Jack, for example. He could not eat too much salt because he had high blood pressure since he was a high school student. After taking the cooking class, Jack knew how to prepare his meals without salt every day, so he ate less salt. As a result, his blood pressure became normal again. On the other hand, if he took the financial management class, he might want to save money by eating junk food; however, lots of salt in the junk food would increase his blood pressure.
Secondly, high school students enjoy the social life, and taking a cooking class can enrich students' social life. For example, if high school students take a cooking class, they would have to practice what they learn. At this time, they can invite their friends to their home, and enjoy the food they cooked. Therefore, they can have fun with their friends at the same time. On the contrary, if students have the auto repair class, their friends would refuse to fix cars with them because fixing car would make their friends’ clothes be very dirty.
Last but not least, high school students place emphasis on money, and taking the cooking class can help students save money. For instance, if students want to make pizza by themselves, they may spend only one hundred dollars to buy the vegetables, meats and the flour. After cooking, they can enjoy the delicious pizza, which is sold five hundred dollars in the restaurant. In other words, they can save four hundred dollars. On the other hand, if students take the auto repair class, they have to spend lots of money to buy tools, such as span and hammer because they need the tools to fix cars.
In sum, high school students should take a cooking class. After all, students care about their health, social life and money, and taking a cooking class can help them to be healthy, have better social life, and save money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...bout their health, and taking a cooking class can improve their health. Take my frien...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...y the social life, and taking a cooking class can enrich students social life. For ex...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...al life and money, and taking a cooking class can help them to be healthy, have bette...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, after all, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76674937965 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05801311656 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449131513648 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9348917656 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4761904762 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2380952381 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443011022034 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160485106082 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142257104762 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288182815454 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114150480034 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.22 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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