In order to attract more tourists, government should improve the safety by hiring more police or improve the appearance by improving the old buildings and streets.
With the globalizat ion, people can travel even easier than they did in the past, and there is the point: How to attract more tourists? In my opinion, government should improve the appearance in order to attract more tourists.
To begin with, desirable appearance of the city can impresses travelers positively. Except for natural landscape, people will also be appealed by the picture in the street. A case in point, according to CNN News, people choose Japan as their most favorite travel destination in the Asia, and the reason is for wonderful building and streets. Tourists, especially female, like to take the photo on the street in which the background is beautiful and archaic, namely, how does the architecture seem to be is important to them. In addition, neat appearance is considered as progressive sign of city, and it draw tourist to stay longer. Improving the old buildings d streets makes urban atmosphere clean and comfortable, increasing the willingness of travelers to visit.
Furthermore, renovated buildings and streets lead to less accidents . To be concise, old buildings will drop tiles and old streets will have bumps or depression, both of them is very dangerous to walkers. For example, you getting hurt abroad due to a street bump, but you can not describe the injury with exactly English words, so that will be very troublesome, due to expensive treatment fee and barrier communication. Tourists attach importance to travel environment, they are reluctant to get any unexpected problem. By contr ast, Thus, the government repair appearance termly, making the city in order, eliminating unsafe factors can attract tourists instead of disinclining them.
Admittedly, some people might think that improve the safety is a better way to attract tourists. Hiring more police may deter the thief, on the surface that the city looks to be of high quality and in good condition. However, hiring more police can not stop all criminals. Improving buildings and streets give a good impression to tourists and avoid travel accident. After all, perfect appearance is the most attractive way to tourists.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, after all, except for, for example, in addition, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20699708455 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83465859419 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588921282799 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0724316646 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34125492142 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109367055496 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130078102342 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233458472281 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133123452353 0.0645574589148 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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