Which of the following summer arrangements is better for a 16-17 year old
student of grade eleven?
1) get ready for some of the major courses they want to study in College
2) led by the teacher to visit museums or historical sites, and then write a paper
With the aspiration of the define of overall education system, increasing attention has been paid on off-campus activities, and a controversy about adequate summer arrangements rises up. Despite some contends that visit museums and historical sites can inspire and cultivate students’ interests, I carry opposed idea that preparing potential major courses might be more appropriate for that students.
Above all, regarding to the coming freshmen, previewing curriculum or taking introductory courses render them to know more about their potential majors and guarantee good performance in their first year. During the process of preparing courses, students are able to comprehend the outlines of each chapter, grasp the basic theoretical concepts and realize the fascination of various subjects. Furthermore, the preview provides students with confidence about their coming campus life and their future. For instance, my sister belongs to that kind of group with good learning habits, she will never have the class if she doesn’t prepare it. Even though her behaviors seem quite extreme, the preview of her potential major course did help her a lot in her first year in university. She passed every exams in university with flying colors without doubt, and eventually graduated with honors. Apparently, her prepare of major courses laid a solid foundation for her excellent academic performance during undergraduate program.
Furthermore, students could eventually find what they really keen on by preparing the major courses, saying that young people might chose their majors without deliberation, in that case the majors they chose directly might be not as interesting as they previously thought after exploring deeper during the university, and finally performing poor in learning, getting low grades in exams. To reduce the possibility to experience that risks, students ought to be preview the major courses they want to learn, reconfirm their genuine interested majors through preparing major courses and do what they really loved in the rest of their lives. As a current online survey on Sina.com manifested, over 58 percent of undergraduates have lost their interests on what they learned and consequently work on what they dislike for they missed the opportunities to have ideal lives, which depend on the majors chose by themselves before entering the university. Certainly, if that people can go back, they will preparing the major courses they are interested in and subsequently redecide what to study as majors.
However, I’m saying that it isn’t worthwhile to visit ancient cites and write something about them, actually this proposal prepare students with the capability of writing papers, doing assignments well in the future. But compared to the preview of major courses that associate with students’ general performances and future directions, preparing the major courses students want to learn seems more preferable.
In a nutshell, there’s every reason to believe that it’s more adequate for the potential freshmen to get ready for the major courses they what to learn with the notions I mentioned above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
With the aspiration of the define of overall education system, increasing...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 997, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'prepare'
Suggestion: prepare
..., if that people can go back, they will preparing the major courses they are interested i...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2659.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50517598344 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78887444018 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548654244306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.3038173943 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.1875 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253711414389 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877914016118 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601082816018 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157906656386 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388686029078 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.27 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
With the aspiration of the define of overall education system, increasing...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 997, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'prepare'
Suggestion: prepare
..., if that people can go back, they will preparing the major courses they are interested i...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2659.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50517598344 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78887444018 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548654244306 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.3038173943 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.1875 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1875 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253711414389 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877914016118 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601082816018 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157906656386 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388686029078 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.27 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.