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In the progressive and sophisticated world where we live, people should help poor people to feel better during their life. There also have been two contrasting attitudes toward this, while some believe that helping homeless people is essential for preserving the society, others adhere to the idea that training the students or assisting old people are fundamental necessities of a society. I support the former view. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, increasing the number of homeless people is conducive to occurrence of different crimes. People spend much time outside their house and without their family members so they live with criminals and learn various types of dangerous behavior. The Asian society of preserving homeless people declares that about 70 percent of crimes are done by people who cannot afford enough money for buying or renting a house since they spend most of their time in street among dangerous criminals. Main crimes of a metropolitan cities are drug trafficking, brutal murders, violence behavior and armed robberies that are done by people who lives in streets. This examples aptly illuminates that, helping people to have a house reduces the rate of crimes in a country.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that inability to rent or buy a house plays an essential role on creating family problems or divorce. Some wives or husbands abandon their family because their partner cannot afford their basic needs like house. To shed light on this matter, I will bring up an example in which I was involved. In the second year of bachelor studies in university, we had an assignment related to our psychology class to search about the causes of mutual divorce and sole custody among families in our city. We attended in different courts and measured the main factors that breeds predicament between partners. The results revealed that most of them could not afford to build or rent a house for their families. It is vivid that having a house helps people to firm their relationship in their family.
In conclusion, contemplating on aforementioned reason, one can logically draw the conclusion that when people can buy or rent a house they never spend their time with criminals in streets so never encourage to do criminal actions. All in all, it is highly recommended that preserving families in most of societies is related to affording a safe place for their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'city'?
Suggestion: city
...riminals. Main crimes of a metropolitan cities are drug trafficking, brutal murders, v...
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Line 4, column 208, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...criminals in streets so never encourage to do criminal actions. All in all, it is hig...
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Line 4, column 296, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the societies') or simply say ''most societies''.
Suggestion: most of the societies; most societies
...recommended that preserving families in most of societies is related to affording a safe place fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03712871287 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66294647764 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566831683168 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9236505812 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.055555556 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224161715771 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658943428915 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527924477799 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140791242673 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377483358203 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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