which will be the best tourist attraction
indoor museum
historical museum
or shopping mall
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the modernization and advent in technology, people living standards modified tremendously, Every city and town is in the race to advance their society. In this regard, getting revenue by attracting tourists to the particular location is of paramount importance. There are different schools of though amongst people, where some consider building historical museum or indoor park would be of great attraction, others contemplate that building a shopping mall will lure the tourists. If I were asked, I would subscribe to latter idea. In what follows, I will delve into most crucial reasons to substantiate my view point.
The first reason corroborating my idea is associated with the notion that constructing a shopping mall will be a good source of revenue by attracting visitors. It is worth mentioning that people without restriction of age and gender have to shop, weather they like it or not. Building shopping centre will attract them for their needs fulfillment and relexation.It is probable, that women living in a city like mines are busy in their house chores or office works. In any scenario, woman love to shop and it acted liek a magical pill to release their stress . Moreover, a small rides inside the shopping malls atrract the kids to have jubilant time too. It is axiomatic, that such toursism will bring enormous revenue for the city that can be used to establish many other amenities and services such as establishing factory, buliding research center and so on. not only it will provide job opportunities to people but also decline crimes rate.
The second reason behind my rationale is rooted in the fact that it is unnecessary and impractical to build a historical museum. This is due to the fact that with the advancement is society, people get extremely busy with their office works and studies, therefore, the value of historical museum is lost, they do not have time and interest in history. Consequently, it would not bring any tourist attraction to them. It is also noticeable that indoor museum park is not important, there are many outside playgrounds already for children. In the specific case of my city, it is more important for kids to play in nature and breath in fresh breeze. Constructing an indoor playground restrict them more at house and they cannot cherish the natural beauty.It is crystal clear that buliding museum or amusemant park would not bring any advantage to town.
BY perusing above paragrapahs, one can infer that shopping mall's construction is critical for tourism. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating. First, It comprises of attraction that bring revnue for town residents. Secnd, Building historical museum and indoorr park is not necessary. As for writer's opinion, I vehemently urge people to raise their voice infront of authorities for constructing a shopping mall.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, as for, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09205020921 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82721877454 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539748953975 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2706692642 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.826086957 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317281147129 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823563879792 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06661959317 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191342792071 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274243811162 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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