Who would you choose to build a statue in your country?
Nowadays, people would like to respect celebrities belonging to their own society by building monuments and statues. If I had the opportunity to choose to build a statue of a famous person, I would prefer to assign that to Mirza Taghi Khan Farahani, known as Amir Kabir, one of the most respectable and worthy politicians and nobles in Iran. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on some reasons that I think it is very important to make this decision.
My first reason and maybe the most important one is that during the history of my country, Iran, there were not many politicians who devoted themselves to the development and progress of the country in terms of industry, culture, health care, education, and so on. Kings and royalties, at their best, preferred to expand their territory and improve military forces as much as possible while they did not care much about issues like sustainable development and providing prosperity for residents. They thought as if they are only responsible for fighting against other rulers in order to obtain much property. However, Amir Kabir who lived about two centuries ago was a sophisticated nobleman who was the son of the master chef of the castle at first, and as a result of his intelligence, perseverance, and merits progressed very soon. After a while, he turned out to be promoted to the position of prime minister. He came up with many wise ideas to reform the country where was not very well developed until then while European countries were competing for a faster transition to modernity. During his short career as the prime minister, he managed to build the first university, found the best modern hospitals, change the culture of the conservative society, and fight against ignorance and superstitions. For example, since they felt vaccination had a prolonged magical influence on them, people resisted being immunized against Cholera, which was the cause of death of a lot of people back then. However, Amir Kabir did not give up and eventually forced people to be vaccinated, and this way many infectious diseases stopped spreading. He also struggled against the oppression and corruption of the courtiers, who finally could not tolerate his actions and killed him after a calculated conspiracy.
My second reason is that, from my point of view, young people need to have an excellent role model to copy their ideas and actions. If we don't introduce a good one, they will be likely to choose someone on their own who is not necessarily the best choice. Because of their lack of life experience, they tend to be attracted to propaganda spread by some actors who may have detrimental influences on their behavior and attitudes. Therefore, I think we should attach importance to introducing great political and historical idols who sacrificed themselves for their country and letting adolescents know their achievements. Young people should be aware of the attempts that have been contributed historically to the progress of their country. Not only does building a statue of such a great nobleman represent a sign of respect and admiration for him, but also it offers others a great opportunity to know him.
Lastly, I think the best way to revive brilliant aspects of our culture and communicating them to other cultures and societies is by remembering our historical idols and learning significant lessons from their accomplishments. By keeping their names and memories alive and, of course, following the path they have laid for us. Erecting a statue of Amir Kabir in a visible place lets visitors be interested in knowing him and his achievements, which in turn leads them to admire him and his impressive actions. The greatness and glory of a nation can be discovered through their heroes and the level of regard they have for them.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are a myriad of reasons that explain why I would prefer to build the statue of Amir Kabir if I could. Some of the reasons, such as respect for his achievements and reforms, introducing a great role model to young people, and communicating brilliant aspects of our culture to other nations, are mentioned above. However, that was like a story in a nutshell. Actually, there are some other reasons which are not mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i think, of course, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 106.0 52.1666666667 203% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3577.0 1977.66487455 181% => OK
No of words: 717.0 407.700716846 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98884239888 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17463580148 4.48103885553 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85188726501 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 357.0 212.727598566 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497907949791 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1135.8 618.680645161 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6666666667 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.481481481 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5555555556 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.51851851852 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149627895719 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394898581801 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503027114297 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920585965343 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507933649101 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 184.0 86.8835125448 212% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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