Why do you think some people are attract to dangerous sport or activities?
Nowadays people willing to do hazardous activity. This essay will discuss about this and provide some reasons including some factual and some social reasons to illustrate the cause of this kind activity in following paragraphs.
First of all, humans’ characteristic is made of different feelings such as fear, exciting, depression, sadness, etc. and experiences which had been acquired during the life. One of the most significant reasons of attending people to some dangerous activity is to quench excitement feeling. According to the recent research, which was done by Manchester phycology institution (MPHI), humans’ brain produce some chemical signal that stimulate part of brain, GFJH1, which is responsible of our fear and excitement. Dangerous activity increase adrenaline of blood and help people to overcome their feeling and excitement. Also, these activities preventing from some psychology issues like depression. People who is avoiding of doing dangerous activity always resist against changes, in contrast people with high attraction to doing hazardous activities are brave and accept changes easily. Moreover, people with this activities perform better than others in stock market and called risk willing.
Furthermore, there is a direct relation between willing to do hard and risky activities and show off. Nowadays, because of developing of technologies and wide spread using of social network people try do activities which happen scarcely. Then, by uploading their videos in Yuotube or other websites try to attract others attention. My friend, for instance, try to climb some dangerous cliffs, just because of his Instagram followers and show them how much he is great and do exception works. In addition, they try to find friends and improve their social class by doing these kinds of activity.
In conclusion, personally, I believe there were more reasons to demonstrate people’s intention of doing these kind of dangerous activities. However, I mentioned two major reasons to clarify my purpose.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59546925566 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86805530751 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624595469256 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8037942448 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.705882353 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342098990016 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10666019936 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825486324076 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193248277937 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697059438997 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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