why people go to the museum?
Museums are an important part of our life. Museums of every country are the places that display history, art, values, and creations and the dreams of people live there in the past and present. People often choose to visit a museum to better understand the culture and history of their country and the best way for the tourists to get information about the destination. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on arguments to supporting my views.
The first and the most reason is that visiting museum give us a chance to know more understand about the history of our country and more appreciative of our ancestors who sacrificed their lives for the future. Especially, when it comes to the soldiers who are battle for the independence of our country which cost thousands of blood. I remember that when I was students in high school, my history teacher informed us that we supposed to go to the national museum. I was so excited because I have never before been there. We visited many parts of the museum, but the war part impressed me so much. War museum brings about that I see the real pictures and the objects that belong to the soldiers who sacrifice their lives for the protection of my country against our enemies. This visiting changed my perspective and caused I love my country more than the past.
The second reason is that when tourist travel to the new country, they usually have not enough information about the destination country and visiting the museum is the best and efficient way to attain variety information about the culture, custom, history, and so on. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. Several years ago, one of my father’s friends came to Iran. He had no knowledge of traditional dancing in my hometown. My father invited him to visit the local museum to introduce him the costume and local dance. My father explains to him that every motion has a special meaning, actually, this is a symbolic dance. After visiting, he was interested in this custom. Also, we use traditional dance at our wedding, my father’s friend participates in a wedding and because of previous information that he gave from visiting museum, he completely understood the means of motions.
By the way of conclusion, base on the arguments explored above, visiting the museum is a helpful way to give us information about history, culture, a costume of every country. And help us to understand deep what happened in the past of our country to appreciate more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion:
...st of our country to appreciate more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85547785548 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7174288907 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491841491841 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7369887694 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1904761905 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152123750131 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465781447281 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536698657447 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102602424826 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620188697002 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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