People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
to feel happier about their lives
to save money for the future
to develop new skills
Thanks to new technology and improvements of modern society in terms of employees' rights, everyone can easily find and start his or her dream job with minimum efforts. Most people agree that the main reason that why we have jobs is that by this way we can earn money, save it, and feel happier in our lives. However, personally, I believe that our tendency to have jobs is more related to develop our skills to be a better person in our professional career. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, being professional is related to be productive and perform important tasks efficiently. Most companies have searched to find people that they can manage their work without any surveillance. In fact, an independent employee, who can employ his or her experiences for managing non-critical tasks, can improve the performance of a company because, by this approach, the company do not need the hierarchical management system anymore, and it can decrease the company's costs sharply. My experience is a compelling illustration of this. I am a manager in an international software company. We have many software developers who live in various places in the world, and managing these kinds of employees is not simple work. We always seek to hire developers that have better skills to manage their work independently. Therefore, developing the skills can increase the chance of a person to find the best job opportunity and decrease the cost of companies.
Furthermore, the other reason that should be noted is that improving our skills is a factor that can affect our self-confidence in the long term. In other words, no one forces people to develop their skills instead of themselves, and It can give them this feeling that they have control on their lives. Many mental illnesses can be cured by improving self-confidence. For instance, recent research in the United States has shown that people with self-confidence can manage their emotions in their jobs and do not allow negative thoughts make their work worst.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that developing new skills and improving the existing ones are the best reasons for someone who have a job. This is because, in this way, someone can be professional, and it can improve self-confidence.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98697916667 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94775907816 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510416666667 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.305353256 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280492379377 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930513304026 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823122726148 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188822035644 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038554832395 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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