People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
to feel happier about their lives
to save money for the future
to develop new skills
Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
It is critical important for people to get jobs during their lifetime. There are tons of different reasons for people to work, such as develop new skills, earn money for future and improve the life quality. In my opinion, the main fact of why people have jobs is to feel happier about their lives. There are two reasons that I will explore more in my following essay.
To begin with, people could enjoy hanging with others who have the same interest. During working, we might conquer enormous obstacles with colleagues to make the company better. Having same goals and interest, people might have a tight bound with others. My experience is the best illustration for this. Five years ago, I just graduated from university. I major in computer science and I had lots of passion on programing. I worked for a big company and our department should finish a difficult project. My partners and I kept thinking solutions for problems and always discussed about the algorithm that used in the project. Although that time is a tough time for me, I felt delightful everyday when I working with my partners. We overcame enormous difficulties on work. After works, we often went out to get some relaxations, such as shopping, eating delicious meals and doing other entertainments.
Secondly, people have jobs could also have the goal for life rather than being hopeless. For example, my brother didn’t want to get a job after he graduated. He always stayed at home and felt the life was extremely boring. He kept wasting his life by watching TV series, playing computer games and sleep. His emotion became upset because there didn’t have any fresh things in his daily life. Until my parent help him to get a job. He has truly figure out the life is filled with happiness. His goal is to be a boss of a company. With this belief, he works until midnight and even sign up an online-courses which teach about the business management. He kept thinking about the way to achieve his goal and improve his skills. At last, he finally became a boss of a popular company. Therefore, having jobs could make people to realize the happiness of life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the main reasons for people to get jobs is to feel happier about their lives. Having jobs could not only get along with people who has the same interest with you, but also have passion and goal in life. Both could lead to enjoy the more happiness of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... a tough time for me, I felt delightful everyday when I working with my partners. We ove...
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Line 3, column 701, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...for me, I felt delightful everyday when I working with my partners. We overcame e...
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Line 5, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Until” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ave any fresh things in his daily life. Until my parent help him to get a job. He has...
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Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'figured'.
Suggestion: figured
...ent help him to get a job. He has truly figure out the life is filled with happiness. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70725995316 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44075071783 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7050324663 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.0 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2333333333 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297905044832 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788650005245 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944368961454 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225713963892 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124408878212 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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