Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowdays, parents have less time to spend with their children because they have lots of works to do. The time that spending with children becomes more important. Some people might think the best use of that time is to have fun with them. However, in my opinion, I prefer to spend that time doing things which are related to schoolwork together. There are three main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, because of preoccupied with busy works, parents might not be familiar with their children’s academic situation. By spending their spare time to doing things related to schoolwork could definitely increase the knowings about children’s school performance. For example, if parents don’t know well about their children’s school works, children won’t put lots of efforts on academic. Their grades might become worse and worse, which is not good for their future.

Secondly, doing things related to schoolwork could make children more concentrate and effective. All children in the world are afraid of being supervised or punished by their parents, they might do things better with the company of parents. For example, when I was in elementary school, my mother always spent her leisure time with me to finish my homework. Under her control and supervise, I kept paying lots of attention on writing my homework. Moreover, I finish my homework in 2 time lesser than usual and havin higher accuracy.

Third, doing school works with children could also make them feel more confident. To be more specific, children always eager to be complimented by parents. By receiving the approval from their parents could make them feel confident and having more encourage to challenge more difficult achivements. At last, the children might be outstanding and being confident of themselves.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that spend time doing things which are related to schoolwork with children could bring more benefits than playing games or sports. Parents can not only get to know about children’s condition in school but also make them more efficeint and confident.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'challenging'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: challenging
...eel confident and having more encourage to challenge more difficult achivements. At last, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22058823529 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60623918683 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497058823529 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.25111109 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.75 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403825557962 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133386424627 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116812314532 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243201108904 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140292931151 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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