you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents always have a pivotal impact on children's decisions. They not only make a significant contribution to children’s physical growth but also play an important role in the development of children's personality. This mater that whether young people are more independent than before is a controversial issue between individuals. Some people think that today, young people can make good decisions independently. I totally agree with this idea for two main reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
The first noteworthy point regarding this issue is that with the advent of computer and internet and the development of technology, there are more chances for young people to make a valuable decision. They can search for different subjects on the internet, increase their knowledge about that topic, read about people's experiences and then choose the best option concerning their subject. For example, before going to university and choosing the best major for my future I gained my information about the various majors and how much they can be practical in the future. Now, I am very happy about my job which I choose it independently.
Second, parents have changed their manner toward raising the children. As we know, the young mind will flourish with proper guidance. Parents, as a guide, provide a good situation for their children to be more independent and let them try everything at least for once. For instance, today, young people have a job since they are eighteen years old. It has a good impact on the formation of their personality. They can learn how to manage their money, how to deal with the problems and finally how to choose the best way for themselves. These results are due to the proper nurture.
All in all, by considering the mentioned reasons above, I personally think that today, young people are capable of making a decision independently. This is owing to the fact that there are some advanced ways to get information from them, and parents' attitude toward the children's upbringing has changed over time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... choosing the best major for my future I gained my information about the various ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, then, at least, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7995357921 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547337278107 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2677554633 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336706324929 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101054755818 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764156659487 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206638944328 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263538249693 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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