You are helping to select a leader for a student organization or club. Do you agree or disagree that a person’s honesty is the most important thing to consider in deciding whom to vote for?
Use reasons and examples to support your position.
Honesty is the most valuable characteristic of a human being in all cultures. Without honesty, many social relations and collaborations could not last very long. The question is: should we vote for an honest leader for a student organization or club? In my opinion, we should vote for an honest leader because since they will be supposed to present some reports about the organization achievements and efficient use of resources, an honest leader can play an effective role in the students' welfare improvements or other relevant objectives. In addition, an honest leader could interact well with the university authorities and reflect the students' problems.
First of all, the students who vote for a leader for student organization have many expectations from their elected leader. The leaders should publish the recent activities and performances of the set of his management. Also, the organizations receive financial or human resources for specific projects or activities. Hence, an honest leader tries to make use of the resources efficiently because he does not want to lie to the students. For example, when I was in the undergraduate level, many students were reluctant to participate in such elections in part because they could not trust in the nominees. The previous leaders in our student organization were not honest about the performances of the organization in some cases. For instance, the organization used to send groups of students to some trips outside of the university. The previous leaders were not transparent about the costs of the trips and the students were feeling that they are being lied. As a result, the participation for the next leader elections had been highly decreased. So, I prefer to vote for a candidate who would be honest.
Second, the leaders should honestly reflect the students' problems to the university's authorities. Typically, there are many inevitable problems in every university or college which should be addressed appropriately. For example, in our university, the quality of foods in the dining hall regularly would have been reduced and many students refer to the students' representatives of student organizations who responsible for addressing such problems. In fact, they should reflect the problems to the university authorities. But, whenever the students complain about the food quality, they tell us that they will reflect the problem to the authorities but no improvements would have been seen. If they were honest to the students they should really oblige the food services authorities to improve the quality of foods.
All in all, based the arguments above, next time I will searching for a candidate who would be really considerate about the students' challenges or problems. Otherwise, the elections are not worthwhile to participate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a responsible'.
Suggestion: who is a responsible
...epresentatives of student organizations who responsible for addressing such problems. In fact, ...
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Line 3, column 691, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t no improvements would have been seen. If they were honest to the students they s...
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Line 4, column 57, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'search'
Suggestion: search
...d the arguments above, next time I will searching for a candidate who would be really con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, honestly, if, really, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31306306306 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05252808751 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454954954955 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 14.0 3.08781362007 453% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8712456827 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.565217391 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65217391304 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214588303203 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077029611364 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685130268227 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136108169515 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697496079521 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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